Jeremy's unforgetable experience. -revised 1

  An annual competition was held in a school.  Jeremy was one of the excellent athletes.  When it was his turn in the race competition, he stood by on the playground with his heart beating quickly.  Then he started to run.  He ran faster and faster and eventually came out on top.  He beat all the other finalists and reached the finishing line!  Unfortunately, as soon as he arrived at the terminus, a  sudden breaking tumbled him down.  His leg was broken and stabbed with his bone.  He was sent to hospital right away.  Being injured so seriously, one of his legs had to be amputated.  For all that , he still wanted to be awarded in the race competition .  Out of his perseverance, he did rehabilitation every day.  A month later,  he came back to school to receive his golden medal which is the most glorious award in his life.  His courage and willpower were respected by the other participants.