2011年4月20日 星期三
Giving reason-(Why is English Important?)
English is important for being a international language. Firstly, it is spoken by many people all over the world, so if we go to another countries but don't know how to speak local tongue, we can use it to communicate with others. Secondly, learning English can help us find a good job such as tour guide in the future. As a tour guide, I can travel around the world. Third, learning English can improve my English ability. With the ability, I can talk to foreigners in confidence. To sum up, English is a helpful tongue which can lead me to cath up an international earth verage. By learning English, the distance from country to country is no longer a problem.
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第二行的country不是復數喔~請注意
回覆刪除第三行的use..
使用語言其實有點奇怪
你可以用speak:'>
倒數第四行的third要加ly唷~
倒數第二行的catch打錯了xD
verage是什麼東東..@@
你是要打villege嗎?
整篇的文章內容有點空洞
可以在更specific的敘述你的原因跟support的理由:>
another countries → country
回覆刪除communicate with others
~ with locals
in confidence (私下地,秘密地)→ confidently
cath up an international earth verage.
是catch up with the global village.
內容還不錯喔
但是感覺好像好多點都很相似
多加點更有說服力的論點會更棒喔:D
空兩格!!
回覆刪除English is important for being a international language.
for應該和because一樣接S+v
a international language 是an唷
but don't know how to speak local tongue
local tongue前要加the或its(可數)
Secondly, learning English can help us find a good job such as tour guide in the future.
tour guide要加a
改成learning English will help us~~和in the future比較合
TO 笨CO 明明就可以打更豐富的
Secondly, learning English can help us find a good job such as tour guide in the future=>後面我覺得可以再舉更多例子~會比較好
回覆刪除我覺得文章的內容比較感覺豐富性比較少~
我覺得可以每一個point的後面加上更詳細的說明喔~~
第二行so if we go to another countries 是other喔
回覆刪除倒數第二行earth verage是???
倒數第四行Third, learning English can improve my English ability.
這句話的意思怪怪的
其他的沒啥問題~
→第二行another country
回覆刪除第二句押建議改成→Firstly, it is spoken by many people all over the world, so if we go to another country and don't know how to speak local tongue, then we can communicate with others in Endlish.
→第四行such as tour guides. 就好吧?!
倒數四Third, learning English can improve my English ability. 邏輯怪怪唷＠＠？
內容有點少會讓我看的不夠盡興~
Firstly, it is spoken by many people all over the world, so if we go to another countries but don't know how to speak local tongue, we can use it to communicate with others.
回覆刪除>>>but we don't know... >>> but為連接詞要連接兩個完整的句子喔 :>
Secondly, learning English can help us find a good job such as tour guide in the future.
>>>Such as 後面可以接多一點例子
As a tour guide, I can travel around the world.
>>>人稱記得一致喔! 上面那句是us 這句是I :>
Third, learning English can improve my English ability.
ability 如果是技能的話記得要用複數喔 :>
1.能力; 能耐[+to-v] >>> 不可數
2.才能; 專門技能[P1]>>> 可數
提供些意見 :>
大致上都不錯喔 :>
第一句有點奇怪
回覆刪除English is important for being a international language.
可改成English is important because it is a internationl language.
Third, learning English can improve my English ability. With the ability, I can talk to foreigners in confidence.這句感覺有點和第一點重複~
可以改成更快了解新知或即時掌握時尚等!!!
結尾不錯喔=)