2011年5月18日 星期三

Contrasing-1

  My friend and I are looking for an apartment to share near campus.  Fortunately, we find two apartments which can meet our expectations right away.  Both them are in acceptable price and near the campus.  To begin with, considered to its soft, I prefer two large bedrooms in Fairfax Apartments on account of that we don't have to share a room and we can have more personal space.  In contrast, CAMPUS APTS has only one bedroom.  Secondly, Fairfax Apartments is furnished, whereas CAMPUS APTS is unfurnished.  I think it's not convenient to move into CAMPUS APTS without furniture because of having to spend lots of money on buying those daily supplies.  Moreover, Fairfax Apartments has an air condition while CAMPUS APTS doesn't.  We can use it to be more comfortable when Summer comes.  However, we need to pay 1250 dollars per month for Fairfax Apartments , while we only need to pay 900 dollars per month for CAMPUS APTS.  Although the rent of Fairfax Apartments is more expensive than CAMPUS APTS, I believe it will be paid off.  So we would like to rent Fairfax Apartments.

6 則留言:

  1. Although the rent of Fairfax Apartments is more expensive than CAMPUS APTS, I believe it will be paid off.
    --> be paid off 這裡感覺怪怪的欸

    還有阿 我比較喜歡 先說明我選擇了哪一個房子然後在說明原因

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  2. Fortunately, we find two apartments which can meet our expectations right away.
    >>>嬸嬸:>我覺得這句可以用過去式
    Both them are in acceptable price and near the campus.
    >>>near the campus 可以省略喔!因為前面已經提過

    To begin with, considered to its soft, I prefer two large bedrooms in Fairfax
    Apartments on account of that we don't have to share a room and we can have more personal space.
    >>>1.consigering to its soft, I...
    由於主詞是人要用主動 這句是分詞構句吧
    原句=I consider to its soft,...
    2.on account of後面不接完整句子
    我不太清楚可不可以用that
    用Because會比較好 :)))

    嬸嬸好棒:>

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  3. 寫的不錯喔~xd好棒!整篇很通順:D

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  4. Both (of)them are in acceptable price and near the campus.
    是不是要加of阿~

    So we would like to rent Fairfax Apartments(for our new life).
    結尾句可多加些修飾~

    這篇十分通順喔=)
    good~

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  5. 最後一行 I believe it will be paid off
    是 it will pay off吧

    其他的都很流暢

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  6. Moreover, Fairfax Apartments has an air condition while CAMPUS APTS doesn't. We can use it to be more comfortable when Summer comes
    這的確是很重要的原因阿><
    整篇文章我覺得寫的滿好的喔~
    送你一個讚XD

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