2011年5月20日 星期五
Contrasing-2
Our company are looking for a talented instructor at English. To our surprise, there are two people who meet our expectations. Considered to their specialties below, We have to choose the one who fits the job best. Firstly, Debra Fines has more education than Lynn. He has studied in several schools and got many diplomas while Lynn Whitnall has only one diploma from New York University. Secondly, Debra's employment experience is senior to Lynn's. He has changed many positions and is well-experienced. In addition, Debra also had English Verb Tenses published by Shortman Publishing Company in 2006. From the several points above, Debra does be an excellent person for us to choose. But we also reflect over Lynn's language skills. When it comes to speaking languages, she is second to none. Lynn is fluent in several languages such as Spanish, French and Japanese, whereas Debra is only fluent in French. We think that she can be good at speaking English, too. Moreover, she is excellent in teaching so that she got an award in 2004. After thinking twice, we decide to hire Lynn Whitnal as our English instructor because we are lack of a gifted person who is good at speaking languages.
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第一句→ Our company are looking for a talented instructor (in) English.
回覆刪除或→ Our company are looking for a talented English instructor.
第二句押,邏輯怪怪 為什麼有2個人符合條件會很驚訝壓@ˇ@? 呵呵
→ There are two people who meet our expectations. 這樣就好吧。ˇ。?
第三句怪怪→ We try to choose one who fits the job best by considering their specialties below.
這樣好嗎˙ˇ˙?
→ we lack a gifted person
who is good at speaking many languages. ?這個理由好奇怪??
我喜歡你在比較時還穿插你抉擇時的考慮情況,不會死沉沉的最後才說出選擇誰:)
Our company are looking for a talented instructor at English
回覆刪除--> Our company are looking for a talented English instructor
To our surprise, there are two people who meet our expectations.
-->To our surprise, both two applicants meet our expectations.
He has changed many positions and is well-experienced.
--> He has acted at many positions and is well-experienced.
第二行 Considered to their specialties below, We have to choose the one who fits the job best.
回覆刪除we是小寫才對 打錯了
整體來說還ok 只是有些地方語意怪怪的
像是to our surprise那句 和 最後 we think that she can bo good at English, too.
才2個人沒啥好驚訝的吧 而且後面他雖然精通3種語言 但不見得他英文很好
大概就是這些小地方要注意
He has studied in several schools and got many diplomas while Lynn Whitnall has only one diploma from New York University.
回覆刪除>>>He has studied in several schools and gotten many diplomas while Lynn Whitnall has only one diploma from New York University.
記得時態要一致喔 :)
Considered to their specialties below, We have to~
回覆刪除we不小心大寫了喔=)
He has changed many positions and is well-experienced.
and的後面是不是要加主詞阿~
或者是改成ing~
We think that she can be good at speaking English, too.
這句的she有點不知道在說誰~
感覺可以標明一下~
寫法和大家不太相同~
有獨特的感覺!!!
Our company are looking for a talented instructor at English.
回覆刪除-->Our company are looking for a talented English instructor.
Considered to their specialties below, We have to choose the one who fits the job best.
兩句主詞相同所以不會是Considered
流暢的看完了~
第一行的at不太確定~
回覆刪除這句完全是中文的寫法吧XD
Debra Fines has more education than Lynn
還有他們兩個人都是女生...
整篇的邏輯有點怪怪的
我還以為你要選另一個人
我覺得你可以強調妳要選的那個人有多好
然後再說然後另一個人卻怎樣怎樣(講壞處)
因為感覺妳兩個都很誇獎@@~
Firstly, Debra Fines has more education than Lynn. (改成教育經驗會比較好吧educational experience)
回覆刪除文章感覺有加入一些難以選擇的感覺~
只是看到後面時還是有點搞不懂要選誰~
彼此之間的差異可以做的明顯一點會比較好喔@@